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Portrait of an Ugly Girl by ~nostalgicstar:iconnostalgicstar:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark




This feels like..
being locked up
in a room..
by myself.
When my worst enemy
is my self.
Because i
scratch
and i tear,
i peel away my lively flesh..
because its ugly
its ugly.

Like everything else,
my face..
i smash my face into the mirror
shards of broken glass
penetrating
my watered down skin
Its ugly,
its ugly.

My life..
i throw my life out the window
..land in a helpless heap
in the freezing
fucking
cold snow.
Immobilized
by the pressure
of the ground
that crept up so fast.
this could get ugly..
this could get ugly.

Wait till
someone comes home
Will anyone
ever come "home"?
i dont know
my family anymore
I dont know,
this skin that i live in
all i know
is my soul,
and its ugly..
its ugly.

Glass stuck in her cheeks
a portrait of
pretty ugly
fucked up "me".
ice that reflects
a picturesque veiw of the
world around "me"
All ive known is ugly,
it was so ugly.

And as we look around,
all these Pretty things in veiw..
i wonder.
What would it take
to escape?
This skin, this girl
that i hardly know.
Shes so ugly
shes so ugly

And as we look around,
we go seperate ways
seperate by skin
and i'm out of touch
Admist the cold
wintery air
On my OWN
with no body to
direct me
I have my own destinations in mind
and theyre not so ugly.
there not so FUCKING ugly!
©2002-2010 ~nostalgicstar
:iconnostalgicstar:

Author's Comments

This is what i felt like doing..i know my mind is better then the body that i live inside, and i want to escape..just a...nasty thought i had the other day when i was really upset. Hope you like..i dont like it all that much and thanks ash for letting me use your eye

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~silentpixie Dec 8, 2002, 4:57:14 PM
u dont like this?! i love it, im making it a fave ;-) (Wink)

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~beautybhindthelenz Dec 8, 2002, 5:08:13 PM
thats awesome donners. i love you, and its really good, i understand what you mean in this sometimes. I LOVEEEEEEEEE YOUUU
what did one volcano say to the other?
i lava you.

keep up the good work

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~cornee Dec 8, 2002, 5:10:47 PM
I love this, but it's sad.. :( (Sad)

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-~cornee____
"This place is scary! Everyone has bags! What's in all those bags?!" -Squee, in JtHM #3
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~pixi33 Dec 8, 2002, 5:32:14 PM
Tears That is so wonderful and so very sad. Worried I hope you are feeling much better. Hug And thats just in case you are or even if you are =) (Smile) This is wonderful keep it up
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~laurlooo Dec 8, 2002, 5:55:18 PM
Hug Wow Donna this is amazing. +fav I can feel the emotion in this.... the insecurity..... the lack of self esteem... the hurt and everything. I'm sorry... I wish you didn't feel this way. You shouldn't. You know why? Honestly, you are the coolest person I know. You don't BS, you're yourself, you're pretty, and you have the best personality. Don't think you're ugly. You're not, I promise. Although, it is normal, I'm telling you, you're a beautiful person.

I love you!

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m.i.l.k.s.h.a.k.e.s. <3
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~swtangel181 Dec 8, 2002, 6:54:18 PM
i love this but its kind of troubling how i wrote a poem along the same lines a few months ago. its sad, but also comforting to know i'm not the only one feeling that way.

Hannah
Work like you dont need the money
Love like you've never been hurt
Dance like no one is watching.
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~jesuseatsbabies Dec 8, 2002, 9:17:11 PM
So actually I don't like most of this very much either because it's really angsty and doesn't seem to have much of a point past that, but I just wanted to comment on the last three lines, which were pretty good. Like, the rest of it seemed like anger on sedative just carried to a ridiculous level in order to shock, but the last three lines seemed sincere. So, a good ending, saving grace.
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~terov Dec 8, 2002, 11:30:16 PM
Mmm. We sometimes need our daily dose of angst.
Incidentally, beautiful people have what, twenty, thirty years to enjoy their appearance?
Then they'll be hopelessly depressed by their abusive husbands and cheating wives.

He who laughs last....

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Seek and ye shall find.
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~xazrealx Dec 9, 2002, 11:45:25 AM
Very graphic and angsty but everyone writes angst so that's ok :) (Smile)

self destructive atmosphere laced with depression and the need for escape.

I won't say I "like" it because you can't like something this depressing hehe

But it does evoke emotion and has a flow to it. So no I don't "like" it but yes I do think it's a good piece of work 8) (Cool)

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If you are reading this I probably commented on something. If it was bad don't worry you can probably get some professional help, if it was good well you probably still need some.
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